Sunday, October 26, 2014

First Draft



   Do you know a man called Troy Davis? He was a convict in death row in America. He was accused of murder, however the surprising fact that startled people all over the world was that there was no physical or concrete evidence indicating he was the murderer. The victim was shot, but no gun was found. Nevertheless, only based on 9 witness's testimony, he was found guilty and was sentenced to death because the state he was living adopted death penalty. 7 witnesses of them confessed that they were forced to testify, however the confession was too late. It was after Troy Davis's execution in 2011. Many people mourned for his death, for there was hope and possibility that he could have lived if he was not executed for a little more time or if the state didn't adopt death penalty. His death threw a heavy question about the modern society's policy which is death penalty. If he was an innocent man, he is a representative victim of the death penalty. Not only the victims that could be resulted by the mistakes made in the process of death penalty such as Troy Davis in this case, but adopting death penalty doesn't have enough advantages than not adopting it. Therefore, the death penalty is right to be and should be abolished.
  Death penalty, also known as capital punishment, is a punishment of a crime regarding lives of people that puts a criminal into death. Currently 58 nations adopts capital punishment, 98 countries have abolished it , 7 have abolished it for ordinary crimes only, and 35 have are not using it practically. We can consider most of the countries are abolitionist and 90% of all executions are performed in Asia. According to death penalty information center, death penalty states have higher murder rates than non-death penalty states. Murder rates in non-death penalty states grows down more and more each year, faster than death penalty states so that the murder rate percent difference in two areas increase each year. This is the general background of contemporary death penalty. As you can see, death penalty is an old-fashioned vice that people should pursue not adopting it. If people ignore the following arguments of mine, it would lead to generation of more innocent victims of the system.
  Death penalty has too many negative effects than positive effects. Actually, if seen in a general perspective, people can say there is no positive effect. Given this, death penalty is a very irrational system that could be used in modern society. This is because the original purpose of death penalty was too ancient; revenge or eliminating dissidents. However, revenge cannot help the victim or the victim's family or the criminal or whoever related. This cannot help or solve anything. Also, in contemporary society, eliminating dissidents only exist in societies of dictators. Therefore, death penalty is inappropriate for us to use in modern society.
  People's right is also a very important social issue. For hundreds of years people fought and earned their rights however in the death penalty system we ignore such rights of criminals. They are the same humans as innocent person and thus should have equal rights. It is inevitable to treat them differently from the innocent ones since they have committed crimes however that doesn't mean we can throw away their rights in the name of law. We should also consider the rights of the physicians that work in the death penalty execution sites. When doctors become doctors, they make oath called the Hippocratic Oath which includes basic ethical foundation of doctors which is always working for the health of people. However, by making them perform the execution, we are forcing them to break the oath and possibly giving them unforgettable memory of guilt. That is violating the rights of the physicians. Whether they chose to work doesn't matter because they might be subtly forced such as the financial circumstances. Considering these, we should abolish death penalty if we care for people's rights.
  My opponent's representative argument is that the death penalty prevents crimes by making the would-be-criminals afraid of the anticipated punishment, which is death in this case, of their behaviors. This could be true if we consider the possible criminals that are only brave enough to commit crimes when their lives are guaranteed to be safe. However, according to the survey conducted by death penalty information center, as I mentioned before, the visible result is actually opposite of their argument; death penalty states have higher murder rates than non-death penalty states. Murder rates in non-death penalty states grows down each year and that reduction faster than death penalty states so the murder rate percent difference in two areas increased each year. This shows that the opponent to the abolishment of the death penalty has already failed to meet their anticipations and is keep insisting it irrationally hoping it would work someday.
  We are living in a rational world. As humans evolved, they became intelligent. We became able to know that logic, reason, and effects should be our goals in our lives in order to survive. However, there are still some things that cannot be explained irrationally. Those things could be good to remain unreasonable such as love, sacrifice, and other emotions, but we cannot ignore the vices, the things that are just too old and too stiff to follow up the growth of the consciousness of people. Then what we should do to them is not letting them be. That is actually not different from blinding yourself while a man in front of you is in danger, calling for your help. If we let the death penalty exist, victims of this old-fashioned vice system will eventually come out. Victims such as Troy Davis will keep coming up. We should not let that happen. We should prevent that from happening while we can by abolishing irrational death penalty.

Research 3

Source:

Deterrence: States Without the Death Penalty Have Had Consistently Lower Murder Rates

http://www.deathpenaltyinfo.org/deterrence-states-without-death-penalty-have-had-consistently-lower-murder-rates

My Topic:
Death Penalty should be abolished.

What I hope to learn from this source: 
I want to find some statistics to support my argument saying that death penalty is ineffective in preventing crimes or reducing crime rates.

Notes:
1. murder rates in non-death penalty states stay lower than death penalty states in decades.
2. this statistic supports the ineffectiveness of death penalty.
3. this article gave me new perspective; death penalty(revenge) does not help the victims's families.

Final Thoughts:
I realized that in most cases the victims's families don't want revenge. Also, in the statistics suggested, death penalty showed the opposite effect of deterrence. This proves the ineffectiveness of death penalty. In the essay, I could say that for what does the death penalty exist, if it can not help the victim or the criminal or whoever related or even whoever not related, the society and its people? It is just an inefficient murderous justified vice.

Research 2

Source:

Davis case helps focus on what's wrong with death penalty

http://edition.cnn.com/2011/09/16/opinion/acker-davis-death-penalty/

My Topic:
Death Penalty should be abolished.

What I hope to learn from this source: 
I want to find a real case where a mistake has been made during the process of death penalty.

Notes:
1. Troy Davis was executed according to the death penalty policy even if there was no physical and concrete evidence indicating he was the murderer.
2. Besides him, there has been many victims of the death penalty, and there is no guarantee that cases like that won't happen again.
3. In my essay, I could alert my readers by saying that this could happen to anyone such as your friends your family and yourself.

Final Thoughts:
Troy Davis's is the most notorious case of the mistakes that has been made in death penalty states. By referring to his case, I could be more persuasive when saying that death penalty can have errors in conducting.

Research 1

Source:
Top 10 Pros and Cons
Should the death penalty be allowed?

http://deathpenalty.procon.org/view.resource.php?resourceID=002000


My Topic:
Death Penalty should be abolished.

What I hope to learn from this source: 
I want to find representative arguments of both people who are affirmative and negative about the argument so that I can get help setting my arguments concretely and also consider opponent's ideas. 


Notes:

1. the 'irrevocable mistakes' part reminded me of a young man who was executed innocently several years ago. I should research about him, too.
2. forcing the physicians to perform the execution violates basic ethical foundation of medicine. I could refer some clauses of the Hippocratic Oath and say that the death penalty violates it.
3. I could say that forcing the physicians to perform the execution and violating their ethical foundation of medicine violates their mental health by giving traumas.
4. an argument that death penalty deters crimes have been discredited by social science research. I should look for either the social science research or other statistics comparing crime rates between states that have death penalty and those that don't have death penalty.

Final Thoughts:
Both the affirmative and negative side's ideas helped me set my supporting reasons. However, the one thing I was not satisfied with was that it referred to some researches but it didn't have added in the boxes. I think I should search for exact researches next time.

Saturday, October 25, 2014

Research Proposal

What is my current topic?

My topic is 'death penalty'
My persuasive essay will be about why it should be abolished because the death penalty is ineffective, supporting my idea with evidences and statistics suggesting that it didn't deter crimes. Even if there are some cases where death penalty reduced the crime rate, I will say  sometimes there are things that we don't do even if it is irrational in the effectiveness point of view. Also, I will say that death penalty is ignoring the criminals's rights and that we cannot ignore the possible errors that can be produced during the process of adopting death penalty such as people who are executed on a false charge.

What are my guiding questions?

I am curious about the effectiveness of death penalty, whether it really showed significant results, and the frequency of it nowadays.

What are my current thoughts?

I already know that there has long been a debate surrounding this topic. People who emphasize morality and people who emphasize effectiveness came into conflict. I personally am the one who emphasizes morality and criminals's rights. Therefore, I want to persuade those who are affirmative to the death penalty into thinking that death penalty can never solve a problem ultimately and that it is just a legalized murder.

What is the opposition?

My opponents will be likely to say that death penalty is a way to prevent crimes by making the would-be-criminals afraid of the anticipated punishments(deaths) of their behaviors.

changing the topic

I will change my topic from 'criteria in movies' into 'death penalty' because the former one was too subjective and controversial to set my thesis and persuade people.
My thesis for the new topic is 'death penalty should be abolished'